Reuyan Sean's draft on 'The Conflict begins and ends', provides a reliable understanding on the human ego and its effects as culminated in an individuals instinct. According to the book A New Earth, human ego entails the core wants and values through which an individual aims to achieve and be satisfied. As such, in order to be satisfied with our endeavors we must appreciate the ego we possess. The diversified nature of human being implies that individuals' ego are different and can be articulated to sense of belonging and understanding. For co-existence to be harmonic, we must be able to understand one's ego and well-being. The idea here being to purport for awareness of one's intuition which will impede the ego from taking over the individuals character. Contrary to this, the essay provides that we should be more concerned and able to appreciate our self-instinct and ego. This will induce egocentric nature to an individual's character, thus, the whole of his/her undertakings will be based on self-satisfaction; without regard to the impacts on the environment and the individuals therein (Karl 89).The main idea from the essay's context is to provide the reader with more understanding and an appreciation of his/her ego. Ego is an inborn intuition, therefore it is part of an individual self-instinct. We cannot deny its existence in our daily undertakings and how we analyze the situations at hand. Furthermore, an individual's awareness of his/her weaknesses will enable them to easily figure out the extent of his/her egocentric nature and devise ways of preventing its unethical implications. These ideas are explicitly stated in the essay and as such, provide an inherent way of acquiring and retaining knowhow on egoism by the reader.
In my opinion, the writer should provide a detailed explanation when he states that one cannot define his/her self being through the use of words. For instance, an analogy of his past life experience and how peoples' perception of his endeavors negates the 'real' them, will have been of critical importance when expounding on it. The life of an individual cannot be defined by analyzing his/her ego only, but the real character one possess. Consequently, in order to provide a more realistic and interesting individual's ego sensation, the use of imagery will be of importance (Bates 207). For example, when describing the loss of his parents, the imagery in use will be “......the taste of their death was bitter indeed”.
The sentences constructed by the writer varies depending on the context and the reactiveness of the subject matter to be relayed. Throughout the write-up, most sentences interchange, and do not follow the subject/verb format, in a row, when starting sentences. In addition, the length of sentences varies from short ones like 'Every morning a new arrival' to long sentences like '...Welcome and entertain them all! Even if they are a crow of sorrows, who violently sweep your house empty of its furniture, still treat each guest honorably.' The nature of the sentences provided in the essay implies that the reader will not have to read monotonous sentences embodied in the essay. The combination of both the short and long sentences instigates a sense of enjoyment when reading the content of the essay. From this, the reader can come up with conclusive deductions without straining. Moreover, the tense of the verb is well used and in essence, the use of past tense is seen when the writer uses the descriptive technique to show the nature of his past life. Future implications of over-reliance on one's ego is analyzed by the use of future tense. In overall, the use of tense in the essay is consistent.
The transition of the work from one paragraph to another is logical. The ideas flow smoothly without any inconsistency. The writer introduces the topic with a detailed analysis of the main theme of the book: A New Earth. The body of the essay includes the description of his past life in order to invigorates readers' understanding on the subject matter. The conclusion gives the views of the writer according to the theme discussed. Unfortunately, the paragraphing of the essay is not according to the MLA format as the paragraph should be indented. The in-text citation is not provided as the views in the essay are personal and not derived or taken from another author.
The third and last paragraph needs to be tighten a bit as it includes what had already been stated in the introductory paragraph. The description of his past life should be brief. The reader needs to understand the concept of ego and awareness of one's instinct, therefore, it does not primarily imply that two-thirds of the essay should be based on past life description. The title of the essay 'The Conflict begins and ends' probes the readers' feelings and impose a desire to want to know what kind of conflicts is coming to an end and how it begins. The conclusion of the essay provides a logical explanation and the feeling the writer has towards ego. He provides a relevant conclusion on how the understanding of the book has ensured that he changes the way of living, the perception he has towards life and not to focus on the future but rely on the present deeds.
The writer aims at inducing emotional/psychological sense into the human nature. The way we value our egocentric nature will have a negative impact on the co-existence with other individuals in the society. Individuals must be rational and able to analyze the effect ones' action will have to the environment and the overall populace.
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